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Black Temple Gaurdian
01-04-10, 02:22 PM
Post ideas for Ludicolo here.

Cranky Guy
02-13-10, 09:56 AM
LUDICOLO are known for their quick and agile dancing skills. Elders often say that the dancing of this POKEMON can summon rain.

OddCrow
03-23-10, 04:26 AM
2nd CG's entry

ImmunityBow
08-09-10, 02:04 AM
Ooh, I think I missed this one from before, I don't remember it. I like crankyguy's but I think somehow we should include Ludicolo's "carefree" aspect.

Elders often say that LUDICOLO's quick and agile dancing can summon rain. Lazy, cloudless, summer days, as a result, are the product of its idle siestas.

NyteFyre
08-09-10, 02:09 AM
I like it, but it doesn't really show how they interact in daily life. Maybe you could add something about how it's dances inspire culture or somehting.

ImmunityBow
08-26-10, 11:21 PM
I don't see how it would fit in though, there are already two ideas in the entry. I just worry it's a bit of an adjective dump.

Tyrannigon64
12-12-10, 05:11 PM
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON that likes to dance. Sometimes, it unintentionally cause rain by dancing.

Sev
02-21-11, 02:24 AM
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON that has the abillity to cause rain by dancing. Because of this, the LUDICOLO have inspired many acient cultures.

MeekRhino
02-21-11, 12:09 PM
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. This ability was the inspiration for the ritual dancing of many primitive cultures.

Basically just a rewording of mefan's.

ImmunityBow
02-22-11, 03:45 AM
The reason why I never really jumped on the inspiring culture idea is that here it seems a little too contrived. Unless you can make some kind of clever mexican reference (non explicit, of course) to add a little sparkle to the second sentence, it's a bit uninspiring.

MeekRhino
02-22-11, 04:19 AM
Hmmm. I think you are right. But I need sleep atm, I'll get back to you on that one.

Sev
02-23-11, 10:00 PM
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. This caused many Aztecs to believe it was a god.

Tyrannigon64
02-23-11, 10:27 PM
No Aztecs. There are no Aztecs in the Pokemon world, just like there is no Caldera/Kirant in the human world.

Reliability
03-19-11, 01:57 AM
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. Its garb has caused it to be mistaken for a participant in a spring festival.

I'm not sure I even like that. It feels weak.

zeroality
03-19-11, 06:49 AM
I actually liked the god thing, if we could get that one worked out?

I'm fine with the rain thing, but the "garb spring festival" thing is... well... weak - as you put it.

ImmunityBow
03-19-11, 02:21 PM
Really? I think it'd cause more people to just do a spit take since the idea of Ludicolo as a god is kind of bizarre.

zeroality
03-19-11, 06:46 PM
http://th07.deviantart.net/fs12/150/i/2006/284/2/8/Miror_B_by_emlan.png
Not this dude.

But alright if you think it's too unbelievable...

I don't have any good ideas though. I'm a good editor, lousy creator.

Reliability
03-19-11, 06:49 PM
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. It has developed a following among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.

zeroality
03-19-11, 06:51 PM
I don't like using carefree twice but I don't see a way to change that.

+1

Reliability
03-19-11, 06:52 PM
I don't like using carefree twice but I don't see a way to change that.


Fixed

NyteFyre
03-19-11, 07:23 PM
+1 vote

sounds about as good as we're going to get with this.

Cyndadile
03-19-11, 08:51 PM
+

ImmunityBow
03-20-11, 02:37 AM
Sorry to kill the bandwagon but I don't think this is the end of the line for this one. The idea is sound and the entry is fine but the entry definitely has some room for development. What I find specifically problematic is the phrase "It has developed a following," which seems too vague. A little more specificity would make the entry perfect IMO.

Reliability
03-20-11, 05:33 PM
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. A semi-religious cult has formed among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.

NyteFyre
03-20-11, 07:32 PM
Eh, either wording sounds fine to me, Reli.

zeroality
03-21-11, 08:54 AM
Approve.

Cyndadile
03-21-11, 07:13 PM
+

Irot_Rebod
03-22-11, 01:38 AM
I think the slight rewording in Reli's makes this entry solid.

zeroality
03-22-11, 09:05 AM
I spy four votes.

Reliability
03-22-11, 01:08 PM
Ludicolo: LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. A semi-religious cult has formed among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.