Eevee

[Black Temple Gaurdian]

Post ideas for Eevee, the Evolution Wonder, here.

[Black Temple Gaurdian]

EEVEE is widely known for its genetic instability. When exposed to certain radiation, or hitting puberty, its cells will become high unstable and mutate into completely different ones.

[Tyrannigon64]

Wait, Pokemon have puberty!? O.O I'd take out the "Or hitting puberty" part. Otherwise, I like it.

[Black Temple Gaurdian]

I would, but then explain how it evolves into Espeon and Umbreon.

[ImmunityBow]

Espeon and Umbreon are both exposed to different types of ultraviolet radiation. You phrasing is very awkward though. "Completely different ones" could be reworded.

[Black Temple Gaurdian]

EEVEE is widely known for its genetic instability. When exposed to certain radiation, or hitting puberty, its cells will become high unstable and mutate into radically altered forms.

Any better?

[ImmunityBow]

Yes. Another problem though: "When exposed to certain radiation, or hitting puberty, its cells". "or hitting puberty" is a tense change, and should be corrected to reflect the conditional tense.

[Black Temple Gaurdian]

Umm so:

EEVEE is widely known for its genetic instability. When exposed to certain radiation, or upon hitting puberty, its cells will become high unstable and mutate into radically altered forms.
?

[ImmunityBow]

You didn't change anything.

[Black Temple Gaurdian]

Added the word "upon", makes it future tense I think...

[ImmunityBow]

I think it's ambiguous enough that you need to rework the phrase into the sentence or eliminate it entirely.

[Tyrannigon64]

EEVEE is widely known for its genetic instability. When exposed to certain radiation, or when it reaches extreme happiness, its cells will become highly unstable and mutate into one of many different forms.

[Shadow Umbreon]

EEVEE is widely known for its cell's genetic instability. When exposed to certain radiation, or chemicals released during puberty, its cells will become high unstable and mutate into radically altered forms.

[Cyndadile]

EEVEE is widely known for its cell's genetic instability. When exposed to certain radiation, its cells will become highly unstable and mutate into radically altered forms.

^Just this.

[zeroality]

I like, but as usual, grammar nitpick:


EEVEE is widely known for its genetic cellular instability. When exposed to certain types of radiation, its cells will become highly unstable and mutate into radically altered forms.

[Cyndadile]

That sounds better.

[NyteFyre]

Sounds good to me!

[ImmunityBow]

Yeah, that works best. I don't really think we can really explore Eevee further than it has already been taken in the canon games anyhow.

[zeroality]

So that's 4 votes in favor. One more por favor senor?

[MeekRhino]

Yep. Done.

[ImmunityBow]

Okay:

Eevee: EEVEE is widely known for its genetic cellular instability. When exposed to certain types of radiation, its cells will become highly unstable and mutate into radically altered forms.