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PokePoindexter
12-28-09, 05:22 PM
I can remember I had two entries, but I can only remember what was said for the second one:

JOLTEON runs at incredibly fast speeds, making it look like a large yellow blur. When agitated, this POKeMON releases enough electricity to cause massive power outages.

SilentSentinel
12-28-09, 05:27 PM
That one was my favorite out of the two anyway.

ImmunityBow
12-28-09, 05:27 PM
Yes, same for me.

Black Temple Gaurdian
12-28-09, 05:28 PM
"JOLTEON's fur can absorb almost any form of electricity, this trait has unfortunatly lead to several major blackouts. When running, the static electricity arcing off its fur makes it appear as nothing more than a yellow blur."
Bit long, but...

Mediocrity_Incarnate
12-28-09, 08:11 PM
Since I cant remember the other one he did had before ill vote for pokepoindexter's now.

Did the tropius one get officiallized? It was just about to before this.

Black Temple Gaurdian
12-28-09, 08:48 PM
"JOLTEON's fur can absorb almost any form of electricity, this trait has unfortunatly lead to major blackouts. When running, the static electricity arcing off its fur makes it appear as nothing more than a yellow blur."

I shortened it.

ImmunityBow
12-29-09, 02:07 AM
There's a problem with that one. After "electricity" you should have a full stop, and that makes 3 sentences.

Cranky Guy
01-02-10, 10:47 AM
I think you should replace "When running" with "While running".

ImmunityBow
01-02-10, 03:19 PM
The Tropius one had enough votes, and was going to be officialized anyway within a day. I'll put it up unless someone disagrees.

SilentSentinel
01-11-10, 11:44 PM
Bumped cause it has 4 votes.

ImmunityBow
01-12-10, 02:05 AM
Okay, I'll give it a day.

PokePoindexter
01-12-10, 03:23 AM
4-1 in favor of the first right now.

NyteFyre
01-12-10, 07:34 PM
well, i'll gp ahead and vote for the first one...BTG's is a bit too long...