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SLOPOKE has been observed to create the beginnings of innovative designs. A society that could rival humans might be built, but only if SLOPOKE could retain these ideas for more than a few seconds.
Interesting, though the first sentence is awkwardly phrased. It's also a little long. Here's an attempt to clean it up.
Surprisingly innovated designs are left in trails drawn by idle SLOPOKE. It is theorized that if they could remember these powerful ideas, they could from a society to rival human beings.
It's in plural because I couldn't find a way to mesh singular with "society," so this would be one of those exceptions I was talking about.
Um... Isn't it spelled "Slowpoke", not "Slopoke"? Otherwise, I like IB's.
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Just wanted to point out this typo I just noticed.Quote:
Originally Posted by ImmunityBow
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Surprisingly innovated designs are left in trails drawn by idle SLOWPOKE. It is theorized that if they could remember these powerful ideas, they could form a society to rival human beings.
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Originally Posted by Cyndadile
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Does my old vote count towards the edited one? If not, I would like to switch to the new one.
I'm #4.
Slowpoke: Surprisingly innovated designs are left in trails drawn by idle SLOWPOKE. It is theorized that if they could remember these powerful ideas, they could form a society to rival human beings.