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LUDICOLO are known for their quick and agile dancing skills. Elders often say that the dancing of this POKEMON can summon rain.
2nd CG's entry
Ooh, I think I missed this one from before, I don't remember it. I like crankyguy's but I think somehow we should include Ludicolo's "carefree" aspect.
Elders often say that LUDICOLO's quick and agile dancing can summon rain. Lazy, cloudless, summer days, as a result, are the product of its idle siestas.
I like it, but it doesn't really show how they interact in daily life. Maybe you could add something about how it's dances inspire culture or somehting.
I don't see how it would fit in though, there are already two ideas in the entry. I just worry it's a bit of an adjective dump.
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON that likes to dance. Sometimes, it unintentionally cause rain by dancing.
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON that has the abillity to cause rain by dancing. Because of this, the LUDICOLO have inspired many acient cultures.
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. This ability was the inspiration for the ritual dancing of many primitive cultures.
Basically just a rewording of mefan's.
The reason why I never really jumped on the inspiring culture idea is that here it seems a little too contrived. Unless you can make some kind of clever mexican reference (non explicit, of course) to add a little sparkle to the second sentence, it's a bit uninspiring.
Hmmm. I think you are right. But I need sleep atm, I'll get back to you on that one.
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. This caused many Aztecs to believe it was a god.
No Aztecs. There are no Aztecs in the Pokemon world, just like there is no Caldera/Kirant in the human world.
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. Its garb has caused it to be mistaken for a participant in a spring festival.
I'm not sure I even like that. It feels weak.
I actually liked the god thing, if we could get that one worked out?
I'm fine with the rain thing, but the "garb spring festival" thing is... well... weak - as you put it.
Really? I think it'd cause more people to just do a spit take since the idea of Ludicolo as a god is kind of bizarre.
http://th07.deviantart.net/fs12/150/...B_by_emlan.png
Not this dude.
But alright if you think it's too unbelievable...
I don't have any good ideas though. I'm a good editor, lousy creator.
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. It has developed a following among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.
I don't like using carefree twice but I don't see a way to change that.
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Originally Posted by zeroality
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sounds about as good as we're going to get with this.
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Sorry to kill the bandwagon but I don't think this is the end of the line for this one. The idea is sound and the entry is fine but the entry definitely has some room for development. What I find specifically problematic is the phrase "It has developed a following," which seems too vague. A little more specificity would make the entry perfect IMO.
LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. A semi-religious cult has formed among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.
Eh, either wording sounds fine to me, Reli.
Approve.
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I think the slight rewording in Reli's makes this entry solid.
I spy four votes.
Ludicolo: LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. A semi-religious cult has formed among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.