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    LUDICOLO are known for their quick and agile dancing skills. Elders often say that the dancing of this POKEMON can summon rain.

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    2nd CG's entry

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    Ooh, I think I missed this one from before, I don't remember it. I like crankyguy's but I think somehow we should include Ludicolo's "carefree" aspect.

    Elders often say that LUDICOLO's quick and agile dancing can summon rain. Lazy, cloudless, summer days, as a result, are the product of its idle siestas.

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    I like it, but it doesn't really show how they interact in daily life. Maybe you could add something about how it's dances inspire culture or somehting.
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    I don't see how it would fit in though, there are already two ideas in the entry. I just worry it's a bit of an adjective dump.

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    LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON that likes to dance. Sometimes, it unintentionally cause rain by dancing.

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    LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON that has the abillity to cause rain by dancing. Because of this, the LUDICOLO have inspired many acient cultures.

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    LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. This ability was the inspiration for the ritual dancing of many primitive cultures.

    Basically just a rewording of mefan's.
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    The reason why I never really jumped on the inspiring culture idea is that here it seems a little too contrived. Unless you can make some kind of clever mexican reference (non explicit, of course) to add a little sparkle to the second sentence, it's a bit uninspiring.

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    Hmmm. I think you are right. But I need sleep atm, I'll get back to you on that one.
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    LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. This caused many Aztecs to believe it was a god.

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    No Aztecs. There are no Aztecs in the Pokemon world, just like there is no Caldera/Kirant in the human world.

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    LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. Its garb has caused it to be mistaken for a participant in a spring festival.

    I'm not sure I even like that. It feels weak.


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    I actually liked the god thing, if we could get that one worked out?

    I'm fine with the rain thing, but the "garb spring festival" thing is... well... weak - as you put it.

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    Really? I think it'd cause more people to just do a spit take since the idea of Ludicolo as a god is kind of bizarre.

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    Not this dude.

    But alright if you think it's too unbelievable...

    I don't have any good ideas though. I'm a good editor, lousy creator.

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    LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. It has developed a following among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.


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    I don't like using carefree twice but I don't see a way to change that.

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    Quote Originally Posted by zeroality View Post
    I don't like using carefree twice but I don't see a way to change that.
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    +1 vote

    sounds about as good as we're going to get with this.
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    Sorry to kill the bandwagon but I don't think this is the end of the line for this one. The idea is sound and the entry is fine but the entry definitely has some room for development. What I find specifically problematic is the phrase "It has developed a following," which seems too vague. A little more specificity would make the entry perfect IMO.

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    LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. A semi-religious cult has formed among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.


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    Eh, either wording sounds fine to me, Reli.
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    Approve.

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    I think the slight rewording in Reli's makes this entry solid.
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    I spy four votes.

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    Ludicolo: LUDICOLO is a carefree POKEMON whose dancing can cause rain. A semi-religious cult has formed among humans who wish to imitate LUDICOLO's jovial attitude.


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