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    Hypno use their hypnotic powers to manipulate innocent victims. They often gather together groups of children to feed groups of Drowzee.

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    Hypno use their hypnotic powers to manipulate innocent victims. Male Hypno have been known to gather groups of children together in order to feed their harems of females with the children's dreams.

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    I think it might be a good idea to reference that episode of the anime where Hypno makes all the kids think their Pokemon and Drowzee fixes it, but I can't find any way to do it. Something like:
    "HYPNO can make children act strangely", but better.

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    Hypno's power is imbedded in its pendulum, when it swings onlookers feel urged to follow it. Ocassionally children who witness young Hypno practice are draw into a state where their imagination overtakes their view of reality.

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    I really like that!

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    I think it's a little long-winded. How about this:

    Hypno's power is in its pendulum; those who see it are overwhelmed with the desire to follow it. Its power is so strong that it can cause its victims to lose their ability to think independently.

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    Yes, I agree - BTG's was too wordy.

    I like yours MeekRhino, with some minor changes:

    Hypno's power is in its pendulum; those who see it are overwhelmed with the desire to follow it. Its power is so strong, causing victims to lose their ability to think independently.

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    One more thing:

    HYPNO's power is in its pendulum; those who see it are overwhelmed with the desire to follow it. Its power is so strong, causing victims to lose their ability to think independently.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyndadile View Post
    HYPNO's power is in its pendulum; those who see it are overwhelmed with the desire to follow it. Its power is very strong, causing victims to lose their ability to think independently.
    "It's power is so strong, causing victims..." doesn't make sense.

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    Sorry. Yours looks good. Didn't notice the error when I wrote it >_<

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tyrannigon64 View Post
    "It's power is so strong, causing victims..." doesn't make sense.
    It is proper grammar. "It's" - referring to the pendulum and ", causing victims" is the proper usage of a comma because it'd be a run-on otherwise.

    And uh, the Pokemon name in capital letters is a given. No need to correct that in the future because IB will if needed when he puts it down for the final entry.

    Anyway, vote+ and I'm assuming MeekRhino is voting+ that one too. So 2 votes so far, 3 more por favor senor?

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    Well, I guess it does make sense, but only if said by a human. If the Pokedex says it, it seems wrong.

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    Lol. I guess I wrote it right then second-guessed myself when Tyran told me I was wrong XD
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    Meep +1 Vote.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tyrannigon64 View Post
    "It's power is so strong, causing victims..." doesn't make sense.
    I agree. Shouldn't it be "It's power is so strong that it causes victims" or something?

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    Or what I suggested, "Its (note the lack of apostrophe (sorry for being a grammar Nazi)) power is very strong, causing victims..."

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    Yeah. On....third? thought I have to agree. Go with the revised version.
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    HYPNO's pendulum can send onlookers into a deep state of dreaming. When young children are entranced their imagination may overtake their grasp of reality, causing them to start acting like pokemon.

    bit after the comma optional

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    Sorry to contradict you zero but I do prefer that you correct the HYPNO as it sometimes makes a big difference as to the length of the entry. (Not in this case but, say COMBUSKEN would take up a lot more room than Combusken)

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    I don't really like the reference to a very specific case with yours, BTG. But that might just be me.
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    No, I don't think it's just you. Now that you mention it, it does seem oddly specific.

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    I believe that's because it was first introduced as a reference to that episode, you know the one.

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    Yes, but I don't like the reference to the anime. I don't remember ever seeing it before, at least in pokedex entries.
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    *breath of life*

    HYPNO's pendulum can send onlookers into a deep state of dreaming. When young children are entranced, it causes them to start acting like POKEMON.
    Edit of BTG's latest. I think it's implied that when you are dreaming, you do not grasp reality, so I took that bit out.


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    Timmy! Stop acting like Snorlax and clean your room!

    But yeah, I actually like it. It's fun and flavorful.

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    I like it as well, it's fun and intuitive!
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    Yep.

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    Okay, I generally am not a fan, but if this really is a reference to the anime then that's too tempting to pass up. So closing this.

    Hypno: HYPNO's pendulum can send onlookers into a deep state of dreaming. When young children are entranced, it causes them to start acting like POKEMON.

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