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    When KOFFING evolves into WEEZING, it has so many toxins in its body that it mutates to have more than one head.
    That's all I got.

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    Not one of your best, Tyran...I've seen you do even better (even though that one's pretty nice)!

    When two KOFFING have their toxic gases mix, the result is a WEEZING, filled to the brim with noxious liquids. If one is struck by the sludge it hurls from its maw, the wound will fester and become infected faster than usual, requiring urgent medical attention.

    Bolded part is a cut-off sentence, in case it's too long.
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    I kind of like the bolded section though:

    Two KOFFING mix together their waste material to form WEEZING. Wounds caused from being struck by its sludge will fester and become infected faster than usual, requiring urgent medical attention.

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    [Full of toxic gases, ]WEEZING is often found in highly polluted areas. Wounds caused from being struck by its sludge will fester and become infected faster than usual, requiring urgent medical attention.

    Take out the first phrase if you'd like. In any case, I'd rather start with Weezing than Koffing, seeing that it is Weezing's entry. I can't think of a way to reverse your first sentance, so I tried something new instead.

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    Well the reason Koffing is referenced is because (in Pokemon canon), that is how Weezing forms - by multiple Koffing fusing together.

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    What I'mm saying is that I would prefer to have Weezing the first pokemon mentioned. It sounds more like a Koffing entry if we talk about it first. Something like this:

    WEEZING is a combination of the waste material of two KOFFING [mixed together]. Wounds caused from being struck by its sludge will fester and become infected faster than usual, requiring urgent medical attention.

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    oic, I understand what you meant now.

    WEEZING is a fusion of the waste material from two KOFFING. Wounds caused from being struck by its sludge will fester and become infected rapidly, requiring urgent medical attention.
    I think the second sentence could be worded better but my mind is like derp right now.

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    WEEZING is a fusion of the waste material from two KOFFING. Wounds caused from being struck by its sludge will quickly fester and become infected, requiring urgent medical attention.

    How's that?

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    well, this kind of idea seems to be what everyone is focusing on using, so either edit is fine with me.
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    Cyndadile's edit is much better than mine. I vote+.

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    I like it a lot. +1 vote.

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    Cyndadile has found a rare:

    +1 Votes!
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    Excellent, that's 5.

    Weezing: WEEZING is a fusion of the waste material from two KOFFING. Wounds caused from being struck by its sludge will quickly fester and become infected, requiring urgent medical attention.

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